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Order of the Mortal Knights

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Nanahuatzin    29
Nanahuatzin

I have to confess, i am more than a little nervous... i am not a writer, and only once i have tried to make a fanfic... about ten years ago. Yet the thread on how should the manga end, the over analysis articles, and the general ideas... well.. All that got me an idea, and idea that grow and grow.. and until it begged to be written..

Of course.. English is not may native language... maybe I am completely out of my mind to try this... yet... I am writing this in Spanish and English

well.. this is the first chapter... i think there will be about eight chapters, i even know what the last word will be... but still there is a lot in the middle to be done..

ok, here i go... I hope you enjoy this... and please... tell my if I manage to say something improper, since I may be stretching my English capabilities to the last..

note:

This story is to published in english and spanish

English Version at Fanfic.net

http://www.fanfictio..._Mortal_knights

Versión en español en Fanfic.net

http://www.fanfictio...lleros_mortales

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Nanahuatzin    29
Nanahuatzin

The Order of the Mortal Knights

A few words first

Welcome to this Fanfic. This is an exploration on the Oh My goddess Universe.

I always have been fascinated by Urd. Wild yet romantic. Usually hard headed yet resourceful. A master on S&M yet her hearth could be touched by a children love. I wondered what kind of background could such a beautiful goddess had to become like that, so this is what I have imagined. Also as a nerd I wished to explore even more the blend of magic and technology from the OMG universe.

I hope you enjoy this, as much as I enjoyed writing this. Yet i must warn you. English is not my native language, so from time to time you will find some peculiar (or outrageous) uses of the English language. Please, be tolerant and let me now, then try to enjoy the Story.

Some warnings.

- Alternate Universe. There are some characters of my own and the story departs from Canon.

- I'm a nerd, this history has pretensions of being hard science fiction where advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic.

- The story may reach more than 30 chapters, and still is a work in progress.

- This is my first Fanfic! I hope to hear from you what you think about it.

- This story is written in Spanish and then translated. Please, let me know my mistakes.

Thanks for your attention and join me in this voyage.

"The universe is not only stranger than we imagine, it is stranger than we can imagine"

J.B.S. Haldane, Possible Worlds and other papers (1927)

The Order of the Mortal Knights

by Elnauhual aka Javier Delgado

Fan fiction, based on the characters and universe of "Oh my goddess" by Kōsuke Fujishima.

I do not claim to own anything.

Chapter I

Palimpsest

Dr. Kenji Sugahara was overjoyed. This was obvious to anyone who saw him in the hallways. The professor was a familiar figure at the University of Chiba. He was barely 32 years old and was already a respected academic figure from the university. His methodical and obsessive personality had ensured that his colleagues appreciated his work, despite the extraordinary nature of some of his ideas. His enthusiasm was so contagious that he often managed to make them collaborate with some of his more fantastic projects.

With a sloppy suit, a tie his students swore was an archeological find, and thick, old-fashioned glasses, he seemed the prototype of the absentminded professor from an old film. Still, his eyes denoted an intensity and friendly face and ready to smile attitude, that managed to attracted young people, even when they were not always able to understand everything he said.

This was because the themes that inspired his passion seemed inexhaustible. He had started his career as a botanist, but he added knowledge in the most diverse fields: pharmacology, paleobotany, polinology, ancient Germanic languages, proto Saxon history, ethnohistory, chemistry, paleography and, recently for fun, stereochemistry.

He also was already somewhat of a minor celebrity. He had discovered substances in old preparations with remarkable curative properties. The University was more than happy with the patents, but maybe more important, at least to him, was that some of his articles originally published in peer review magazines, were reprinted in popular magazines were they had attracted the general public attention. Then an editor had requested him to write a book, which had been a success. Not bad for a specialist in the esoteric field of "Etnobothanic studies of European traditions".

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elgordo    10
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Dear Sir: Thank you for posting this story about our favorite goddess.

I like your use of the ancient Nordic in the body of your text. It definitely adds verisimilitude.

Charlemagne is reputed to have said, "He who has a second language has a second soul".

Not a bad soul at all for your "second" language, sir.

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ahhh thanks !! I appreciate that...

and.. maybe it is a good omen. Charlemagne will be mentioned in chapter II :tongue:

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The Order of the Mortal Knights

by Elnauhual AKA Nanahuatzin AKA Javier Delgado

Fan fiction, based on the characters and universe of "Oh my goddess" by Kōsuke Fujishima.

Chapter II

The Enchantress

Keiichi had finished his breakfast, and was waiting for Belldandy to sit next to him. The aroma of tea that was being prepared perfectly fitted the moment. Belldandy was humming a joyfull tune while as she cleaned and ordered the kitchen. No matter what she did, the time for cleaning, always matched the time for the tea mix to deliver the optimal flavor. She neither need to think about it, simply, it was they way it should be.

Keiichi enjoyed watching her moving around. Like a well-rehearsed piece of dance choreography, at the same time it was so natural and spontaneous. He was delighted just watching her to collect, wash, dry and store properly. She looked so perfect, so elegant and she finished it all in a quarter of the time he would have taken.

Finally, she sat next to him in a delicate and elegant movement. They had time to enjoy some tea, before leaving to their work at Whirlwind, the small motorbike workshop they worked.

While technically Keiichi wasn’t still and engineering, he already had acquired great skills thank to the opportunity to play and explore he had in the workshop. In the future he would have decide between this little workshop or to work for a big company, but in this moment, none of this was on his mind, while he watched the goddess that lived with him.

Belldandy as a goddess, did not need to eat but she enjoyed tea and have developed an art at making her own blends. There was perfect balance in the aroma of this blend, one of her specialties. This blend had sharpened Keiichi´s senses, since it was filled with Belldandy´s presence. He could feel the warmth of her body and the sweet scent of her presence as if they were part of the blend. It seemed that it would be a perfect day. He cast his eyes over Belldandy without saying a word, it was unnecessary.

When he had met Belldandy for the first time, he had felt awkward during those silences. He had felt like a fool with nothing to say, but now he knew that sometimes words were not necessary, so now he just smiled at Belldandy and she responded with a milling eyes, then she rested her head on Keiichi´s shoulder. Keiichi smiled with pleasure, because he treasured those briefs contacts. Yes, it would be a perfect day...

Suddenly he remembered something.

-Belldandy, I noticed Urd is not in her room. Has she been called to heaven or something?.

By experience, Keiichi already knew that Urd disappearances were signs of problems. To Keiichi´s the disappointment, Belldandy straightened; she smiled at him gently. She knew where his thoughts were going at.

- No Keiichi-san, this time it is somewhat less dramatic. Urd got up early today because she was going to Chiba university, there is a book she needs, and found it´s at the University library.

-Urd went to a library? To the University library.?"....

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The Order of the Mortal Knights

by Elnauhual

Fan fiction, based on the characters and universe of "Oh my goddess" by Kōsuke Fujishima.

Chapter III

Ghosts from the past

It was the year of our Lord 807, somewhere in the Scandinavian peninsula in the northern lands of Europe. It was almost dawn, the chill of the morning announced the proximity of winter. Here was path where the forest meet the rugged mountains. Nature had provided with a small shelter which was used by a lonely couple to protect from the wind, it was not really cave, but it was adequate.

The girl, who looked as if she barely had left the teen, woke up. Her beautiful face had a haunting copper tone and showed certain seriousness that did not seem to correspond to her age. In that moment, she wished to enjoy a little solitude. Although she felt fascination for humans, there were days she would have preferred to have no contact with them, sometimes they exasperated her, even Fafnir.

Slowly she move away the man´s hand that still lay on her breast, and move aside the heavy fur that covered them. Urth left the warm skin and felt the cold of the morning against her body. The chill wind felt stimulating. The cold would have been intolerable for a mortal, but she was not. She looked at her companion whose body she had exposed, the man involuntarily shivered with cold and she smiled before covering him.

He was a fine specimen of man. He was not chunky but his muscles were firm. His blond hair hung down in strands over his face, framing his almost perfect features: a slightly aquiline nose and strong chin gave an air of determination and tenacity. Indeed, he was a man of this lands but there was something different about him. He did not had the hard features of the peasants, but an air of a nobleman, remarked by his well cared hands.

She left some of the makeshift camp, looked at the horizon and saw the first rays of dawn, then took a deep breath and felt the scent of the forest nearby. The strong fumes of pine oils, the shy scents of wild flowers, the moisture of the earth, all mingled with the stench of burnt wood from the camp fire. She increased her concentration and started to distinguish individual aromas. There was also tars, phenols and other scents. Those were the aromatic over notes, but there were other volatile compounds, weak but still detectable.

She started a soft and monotone song to have better concentration she began to recognize the scents of some small plants that were hidden by those strong odors and felt that something was calling her. She decided to go after this call. She walked into the forest. Her bare feet barely left footprints, it seemed as if she were floating.

She got into the woods and come to a big tree, nearby there were some small purple florets. Yes, that was it!. She cupped her hands around the flowers to empathize with the plant. That was the small plant that had called her. She focused her senses and slowly began to feel their chemical compounds and finally saw something on the was a funny little chain of aromatic molecules, to her it seemed beautiful. She changed her tune and now could saw on her mind, like an advanced simulation, the effects of the compound on a human body. Yes that was what she wanted.

Suddenly she heard footsteps behind. It was Fafnir, he talked to her with some resignation.

- Again looking for plants?

Without even turning to see him, she asked

- Did you brought my notebook?

-Yes, here I have it here. Also I have your clothes. You should not go like that in this cold, other men could see you...

- There are no other men nearby. Is it my body that is bothering you?

The girl stood, her long hair of a pure white, was wrapped around her and contrasted to her copper skin, but this magnificent white coat did nothing to cover her beauty, instead framed it and increased her sensuality. The man could not resist and dropped his eyes as he felt his heart was racing. He cursed himself. She was not his first woman, yet still she did make him blush like a teenager.

Urth smiled, she was fascinated by having such power over men. They have been living together for six months and still her body did not fail to impress him.

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Nanahuatzin

note: I ask forgiveness in advance for my syntactic and lexical sins....

By Javier Delgado

The Order of the Mortal Knights

by Elnauhual

Fan fiction, based on the characters and universe of "Oh my goddess" by Kōsuke Fujishima.

Chapter IV

Potions and chemistry

The line between the past and present blurred, as Urd´s memories and the story of the Dr. converged. Meanwhile, absorbed in his own thoughts, the doctor continued his story as if he were in his classroom...

- No one knows for certain about what happened in that battle. Historic records simply register a Normand victory. Legends do not help either; some speak about gods appearing, other about warriors acquiring supernatural powers. I can only say with certainty that Urth disappeared, and a new word appeared in the language of the people: "Berserk": The frenzy of combat. It was something so terrible that when the Normans launched expeditions called vikingr", they terrorized the shores of Europe from France to Byzantium.

He paused, he put his hand on his chin, had looked awed. He had spent almost ten years tracing all this. Above all, he thought about the notebook...

- And this note-book, the book of Urth, was not lost, but kept hidden. The sisterhood created by Urth, protected it, taking only what was necessary to heal people and defending themselves - He spoke very softly, almost as if it was talking of himself. - I have never told anyone about this. But they were also writing their own stories in it. Eventually, when Christianity was upon them, people began to fear them and weaved strange stories, the sisterhood was disbanded and finally the book was lost. At least I believed it was lost, but - And exclaimed triumphantly - I finally found it! In the form of a prayer-book no less. Its content was erased to use the parchment but we can restore it with our technology

Suddenly the doctor interrupted his story as he realized Urd´s profound confusion. He had no idea why, he could not know she was immersed in the memories of that battlefield. He became worried.

- Are you okay? Is there something wrong?

It seemed as if years trying to erase that memory just had made the wounds deeper. Now she could remember the beautiful face of Fafnir, she recalled the warmth of his body, his songs, his presence and then, the shattered and bloodied piece of clothing that had been delivered to her.

Suddenly she felt a deep anger, anger toward the man that awaken her memories, to this man who claimed to admired Urth, the young woman guilty of the death of Fafnir. She had brought death to the man she had loved but only too late had realized that.

She turned to the doctor. A dangerous fire was beginning to escape between her fingers, and then exclaimed:

-Enough, I do not want know more ... How can love and adore such a woman! She killed the person she loved.

- But Fafnir did not...

-I said enough! Why you delve into the past?

Doctor Shugahara had never been good at dealing with other people´s feelings. The idea that he was responsible of hurting this girl. This girl that may be the one he had idolized for so many years, it was simply unbearable.

- Please, the past teaches us many lessons, but you have to listen, it seems you do not know the whole story!

-I told you I do not want to know anything ... and if you really want to know who I am, I do not care. You are free to believe whatever you want, if you are so smart, Find out!

The doctor began to panic, despite her angry words; Urd's beautiful eyes were wet and seemed about getting full of tears. The vision of those wet eyes hurt him deeply, he needed to do something and words were not enough. She felt a deep need to protect her, so almost without realizing what he did, he approached and embraced her and gently placed his hand on her head so it rested on his shoulder, to his deep surprise Urd made no protest.

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http://www.fanfictio..._Mortal_knights

Warning

I must warn you. English is not my native language, so from time to time you will find some peculiar (as in outrageous) uses of the English language. Please, be tolerant and let me now to fix them. Then, try to enjoy the Story.

The Order of the Mortal Knights

by Elnauhual

Fan fiction, based on the characters and universe of "Oh my goddess" by Kōsuke Fujishima.

Chapter V

Crystallization

— Sensei, Sensei. Good morning

Doctor Shugahara Kenji, heard a sweet and distant voice, but could not understand what she was saying.

— Sensei, Sensei. Your bath is ready.

The voice was heard nearer, was it a dream? He lived alone, so there should be no one there. He tried to open his eyes, but instead of darkness, he saw a throbbing light invading his brain.

— Ah! My head, what is this pain?

He heard his own cry as if he had shouted, his body ached, his head ached, and he felt worse than when he had been bitten by that snake in Costa Rica. What was the cause of that pain?

He felt a cold sweat around his body, and then he smelled the alcohol ... and began to remember.

Where was he? It was strange, he had already asked that question before, but the headache would not let him think.

— Sensei, wait, please do not move.

Whose voice was that? He did not recognize it. Suddenly he felt warm and delicate hands touching his head. There was a Déjà vu. That had already happened before. Then heard how the sweet voice began to chant something that sounded like a prayer, it was mesmerizing.

Gradually, his headache began to dissipate. The cold sweat was gradually replaced by a soft and warm oppression on his chest, and then began to perceive a delicate perfume, it was familiar but he could not recognize it.

He tried to open his eyes again, slowly since he feared the flash would appear again, but instead perceived the penumbra that precedes dawn. All was surrounded by soft red glow as if the first rays of the sun would like to announce his impending arrival.

— Ah! — Suddenly, he let out a long gasp of surprise and recognition. Resting on his chest in a peaceful sleep, there was a beautiful woman covered with the white platinum blanket of her hair. Then he remembered! — Urd! - So, it was no dream, for a moment the doctor was afraid to move, as if fearing the image would disappear.

He closed his eyes and concentrated on his other senses, to make sure it was not a hallucination. Here was the soft oppression, the warmth of her body and the perfume that emanated from her hair, a long hair of a pristine white, which covered her like a delicate garment. He concentrated harder. He wanted to record this memory because he was afraid that everything would disappear. Then he opened his eyes. The woman was still there. Her arms were intertwined with his body. He did not know what to do. Slowly he raised a hand and dared to gently caress that beautiful hair and then gently put his hand on that beautiful head. He gasped and shuddered as he realized it was real.

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The order of the Mortal Knights

By Javier Delgado

Fanfiction, inspired by "Oh my Goddess."

Chapter VI

The duty of a goddess

Giörel, goddess first class second category, was very happy. Actually it was not something unexpected, this seemed to be her natural state. Partly because she was gentle, kind and cheerful, but above all because there was no day that she did not discovered something entirely new that deserved celebration. On her way to work, she walk along the trails of that beautiful realm called Heaven humming a melodious tune. She had a premonition that today would be a special day.

She was a very young goddess. Her features retained something of the sweetness and innocence of a child. In addition she had a restless green eyes, a color she thought, reflected her love for things that grow on the soil, because that was her domain. She had a beautiful brown hair. She liked to thread it in a long braid, and always wore a flower on it. Because at any moment another she might need to go to the earth, she was wearing her ceremonial dress that mark her as a first class goddess.

She arrived at the graceful building of the "Goddess Technical Help Line" one of the heavenly organization responsible for granting wishes to mortals.

The building was unimaginable in human terms, impossible shapes, great spaces extended by more than 3 dimensions. Flowers and vegetation make it appear more like a beautiful garden than an office, but such is the way of the gods. There were corridors that crossed heights that would cause vertigo to any mortal by not having any support or protection.

She greeted her supervisor. Othala, was a goddess that tried to pretend to be strict, but everybody knew she had a big heart. Despite the eternal youth of her appearance, she had literally centuries of experience.

There were only a dozen goddesses in such large space, but they did not need more. Only special cases were treated here. Common wishes were processed in the office of the "Earth Assistance Center."

Finally she arrived to her place. A stylish and comfortable seat that seemed to float in the air. It had several displays and adjustable controls.

She had recently been transferred to this position and like everything she did, she commit at her fullest in her work, but sometimes she went beyond her duty. She tried to understand everything, even when she was not meant to. And now, after attending some cases with supervision of senior Goddess, she had finally received permission to work alone. That among other things, meant she has been assigned to be in the place that had once occupied Belldandy. This had been her seat.

That name make her feel a gentle warmth, there, where goddess have their hearts. She secretly wondered if one day she would also became enamored of a mortal. But the mere suggestion had provoked a reprimand from her supervisor. Love had been the cause of a very important loss in her staff did not want another. By now it was known by everybody that what was holding Belldandy on earth was no longer a contract, but something she considered more important.

Giörel smiled to herself, and then with a rather guilty air, instead of beginning her work opened Belldandy´s file. She already knew it by heart, but there were aspects that did not understand. In order to avoid calling attention, she chose to keep the display in two—dimensional mode, much more discreet.

There it was, a perfect record, since a child everyone expected great things from her. Her list of achievements was remarkable. Champion racing, songstress spell master, a certificate without blemish as Valkyrie, one outstanding thesis in human history, on the scope of the "Urth" case. However, there were some strange anomalies. Nowhere was not mentioned the name of her main tutor, they were very important she must had one of the best. She also had a strange long period of inactivity. Giörel liked to imagine she had some secret mission or something like that. Celestine's name had been completely removed from heaven´s records and few remembered him. But what most impressed her was the relationship with Keiichi. Suddenly she heard and annoyed cough behind her.

She quickly turn off the display, but it was too late. Her supervisor was floating behind her, with a stern expression.

— Othala, I am sorry, I did not felt you come.

— Again with this file?, I think you must know it by heart. You have more important matters to do than daydream.

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Nanahuatzin

Fan fiction, inspired by "Oh My Goddess" by Kosuke Fujishima.

The order of the Mortal Knights

By Elnauhual

Chapter VII

Execution!

In Hell, the realm of the demons, an alarm howled and the hearts of its inhabitants were squeezed with fear. The alarm was announcing that someone had violated the doublet system. A god had been killed and a demon soon would share the same fate. It sounded like the cry of a wounded beast. In the vast central that housed Nidhogg, the nerve center of this world, several spheres of light began to form. They were the size of a man and had a hideous greenish tone. They began to move furiously and went along the walks, halls and buildings in this world. They were looking for someone!. Simultaneously an announcement echoed everywhere, a powerful and impersonal voice spoke:

- Doublet System activated. The death by violence of the first class Goddess Giörel has been reported. Her doublet will be searched now for execution.

The Shaikh Anan-Reng saw the lights and cursed. How could they have agree on something like that?. Then he saw the lights running toward him and cursed again? Would be him the one chosen to die? .

But the lights went past him, then heard another announcement.

- The doublet of the goddess Giörel had been found: Anang-Reh. He will be placed under supervision. The execution code in his body has been activated. Execution time in one hundred standard cicles.

The Aman Shaikh-reng saw the lights shining where he had just left his son. He witnessed how he was surrounded by them, and then wrap him to took him prisoner.

The Doublet system had as purpose, preventing the gods and demons to kill each other. It was a hostage system. If a demon or a god was killed, his doublet was executed. Thus was designed to be as dramatic as possible. I had to cause such terror that no one wanted to activate it since nobody knew who would be their victim. The lighting display, the search and exhibition of the victim followed by a waiting time, so everybody would be able to see the execution, all was carefully crafted to that end. All this had been coldly designed.

The young demon was petrified with surprise, He knew what it meant. The Doublet system code inserted into his body years ago, when his soul was paired with his doublet had been activated. His death was already scheduled, there was nothing he could do about it. He had a hundred cicles, about half an hour in earth time, to leave his affairs in order.

Anan-Reng saw helpless as the spheres took away his son and then screamed, fell to his knees and began to mourn not caring about his dignity.

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Nanahuatzin

Fan fiction, inspired by "Oh My Goddess" by Kosuke Fujishima.

The order of the Mortal Knights

By Elnauhual

Chapter VIII

Primates

The elegant auditorium of the University of Chiba was full of activity. Inside there was the most diverse collection of human specimens that one could imagine. People of all races and nationalities, were arguing cheerfully in a dozen languages as they walked to their seats. It had already been announced soon would began the keynote address. However, there was a commotion among the first rows. People refused to move away from there, everyone had heard rumors and wanted to check personally about them.

The reason for the tumult of course, was Urd. Today her attire was not as revealing as usual, but it was impossible for her to go unnoticed. She wore an elegant gown and with her usual fashion sense, it enhanced her figure and beauty. Dr. Shugahara was also uncomfortable being the center of attention. Everybody wish to meet the woman who seemed to have made it to the doctor´s hearth.

Urd´s beauty was not the only reason about everyone curiosity. Her presentation badge, and idea of Shugahara, also caused interest:

- Urd: Enchantress. Specialist in Nordic magic, spells and remedies.

Besides being the center of attention, there was another reason for the nervousness of the doctor. He could not help thinking that technically this was their first date. Of course for many people, to invite a beautiful woman to something called "Fifth International Congress of Ethnobotany, ethnopharmacology and phytochemistry" could hardly be called a date.

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